这只是我的一篇英语作文，如果有大佬给些建议什么的，非常感谢，特别是词汇谢谢(6)

“ I started to lean my body against the surface as close as possible trying to figure out what’ s hiding deep under. I must admit I was scared to hell, if Moltzia wasn’ t there, I would rather curve into a ball. Then nothing, there was only darkness under. To be honest, that time it seemed the lake was actually the dark sky, while the fog up around our head was the land, the snow. The music became louder and louder, in the meantime, it also became much enchanting, much charming, or could be described as being addictive to it. I leaned back and turned to look at Moltzia. I was shocked and terrified. Her eyes were blanked, I couldn’ t see her pupils. She was looking down at something, something just near. I turned my head to the direction she was gazing at. I almost jumped out into the air and screamed, but I controlled myself knowing that would cause Nacken to drown me straight away. I held my breath and turned my head back towards Moltzia in order to avoid Nacken from being in my sight. Moltzia was looking at a small creature instead. It had rotten skin, bald head, and stinky smells. I didn’ t know how Moltzia was able to breathe under that strong smell. Its eyes were twinkling and watery, its nose was sniffing towards Maltzia, and a kind of desperate moaning begging voice leaked from its mouth. It held out his rotten hands. I can still clearly remember that it only got 7 fingers in total, and the rest were all rotten or chopped down. It seemed that it was being tortured physically, his head was tied up with a chain, his eyes were also a bit swollen and there were clear visible gross wounds across his body. Moltzia, however, seemed to feel sympathetic to the creature and even held out her hand towards the creature. She petted its bald and rotten head. I rushed towards to stop her, but a huge wave or a kind of power struck the raft, broke and tore it into pieces. And the water became extremely furious and fierceful.