这只是我的一篇英语作文，如果有大佬给些建议什么的，非常感谢，特别是词汇谢谢(5)

“It seemed that it was impossible to reach the shore by the dawn and the fog was still unwilling to dissipate. Therefore, we found a reef and tied our raft with a string, and decided to take a small nap. It was a bit hazy when Moltzia started to shake my body. “ Wake up, please wake up, there’ s something around, just near our raft. It’ s here, at the bottom!” “ Ok, ok, let me just get sober a bit. ” In a trance, I felt someone was hitting the bottom of the raft and causing repetitive noise. Somehow, the music showed up again. I was the bigger one and I ought to take care of her well. ” “ What happened? Grandma? What was that noise from? ”