这只是我的一篇英语作文，如果有大佬给些建议什么的，非常感谢，特别是词汇谢谢(2)

She stares back at me from the fireplace, gently asks: “Have you ever heard of Nacken.” “ Nacken, that scary monster from the folklores or jokes? I got once teased for believing that by my friends.” “They should feel the fear and should respect this name.” Grandma replied a bit anxiously. Nacken, a sort of ghost, monster or spirit that lives in the water. Wherever there is water, there will be Nacken. He has a head of extreme long dark hair covering his face and seagrasses on the top of his head, clearly sketched bones with the deadly white skin. He is a bit more likely to be described as a walking skeleton with hair and skin however. He often appears with a music instrument, like a violin with incredible skills into it. Although his rhythm is very charming and appealing, himself seems to be desperate all the time as if he was tortured before. People always get fascinated and attracted by the enchanting music which causes them to walk deep into the water until they eventually get drowned. “ He is a spirit, a charming evil spirit. His name needs to be spoken in awe. The poor Corgan is his pet, being tethered with a rusty chain, its watery twinkling eyes always beg the sympathy from the passers. A poor creature being chained, only to suffer the torture of the time, watching its flesh gradually rotten.” “But there is no such thing in the folklore about Nacken.” I ask confusedly “It is because there is a reason. And you mustn’ t tell this to anyone else, unless…